Most people are sleeping less now than before. However, our lifestyle seems to have improved. What has happened?
I think that the new modern lifestyle has made our lives busier than before. For instance, nowadays most people have got a job, some hobbies, a family and financial problems. Therefore, our lives have become more enjoyable owing to their hobbies, but we have less time in order to do other things like sleeping. Workdays have also become longer so as to allow them to invest more money in hobbies. Moreover, internet networks need a lot of time to be up-to-date with society, above all for teenagers.
In conclusion, we should relax a bit and enjoy our lives without leaving out pleasures like sleeping and resting.
Be careful with the use of "most". Check how to say "la mayoría de la gente"
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In the sentence "Workdays have also become longer so as to make more money to invest in hobbies". You'd better say " para que la gente pueda..." instead of "para hacer"
dejar de lado / excluir = leave out
Now correct the mistakes and keep the changes underlined or in a different colour so that I don't have to read everything again.
Good correction, but I still don't understand the sentence I've underlined. Can you tell me what you mean?
ReplyDeleteI mean that people have tu spend a lot of time in order to be online everyday in internet networks and publish new photos and coment others' posts, for instance.
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