Why do you think people in general sleep less now than before? Do you think the pace of modern life may be bad for us? Explain.
Nowadays, we have a lifstyle (SP) very different than (PREP) years before. We have a work (WW) that it (G) spends(WW) us so much hours (G) and now we have more things to do than before.
Lot of young people spend their time playing sport, making (WW) their homework, studing (SP) , waching TV or in front of the computer. Moreover, years ago the parents told their children to go to the bed early in order to be in conditions to have a good day, to be concentrated in (PREP) school and relaxed. Nowadays, the parents allow to their children to watch TV a lot time until 11 or 12 and this is a problem.
Furthermore, older people because of their job (WO) arrives (G) at their home very late and after dinner they don't go to the bed to sleep.
These actions could be dangerous for their like (WW) and their health because if you don't sleep the necessary hours the day before, you probably be (WO/T) tired and you will acotumated (T) to a bad lifestyle.
Thank you for posting it so soon.
ReplyDeleteIn the first sentence I would change the order and say for instance "Nuestro estilo de vida es muy distinto a..."
Then remember that "work" is a verb.
I would say " Pasamos muchas horas trabajando..."
When you correct your essay, please keep the changes underlined so that I don't have to read everything again.