Nowadays a lot of people go to the gym in order to get fit because in our days physical appearance is more important than some years before. But sometimes you can hurt yourself in the gym if you don’t do it well.
In the past, people went to the gym to do exercise, to keep fit or because they liked it. But now physical appearance is more important and people prefer to do intensive sport in a short period of time and they think that it is enough to lose some weight. However, experts say that it is much better to do moderate sport but for a long period of time. What’s more, not only gyms can help you to get fit and be healthy, in my opinion it is much better to do other sports like walking, jogging, tennis, or whatever instead of going to the gym.
In conclusion, I think that being healthy is important, very important, but not to be good looking. Doing sport is important for oneself and because a healthy person is happier.
Improving, but be careful because to express purpose you have to use "to/in order to / so as to", not "for".
ReplyDeleteI suppose in the last sentence of the second paragraph you mean " en lugar de ir al gimnasio", no "para ir al gimnasio"
Notice I left you a comment in the other composition.
good correction. As you can see I've corrected a few more things in blue. Once you've read it erase the words in red and change the colour of my corrections.
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