Nowadays, TV has a lot of influence on people that don’t have enough personality or that is very influenciable. Music or fashion programmes, TV shows, quizes, advertisements, the news, and other type of programmes are being very important in viewers' lifes/lives, maybe too much. In our days/at present/ nowadays , we are depending/depend in excess about/on what TV show to us.
On the one hand, I think that some programmes are good and could be necessary to entertain, have fun or learn about some topics. We can watch any interesting thing we want to, having moderation about how much importance we have to give to that information and know why we are watching that programme. Sometimes the information is useful but sometimes it doesn't/isn't.
On the other hand, some programmes have a very powerful influence on people, and it could be a problem. For exa mple, the advertisements about/of products to make people younger or how to be thin is/are getting too much importance, and make people waste so much money on it or get attention children/ call the children's attention that shouldn’t care about these things.
All in all, we should have to /should watch TV with some moderation, not giving so much importance at /to some programmes that aren’t important, because we could have problems if TV influences excessfully in our lifes/ influenced us excessively/ overinfluenced us. It’s more important to be how you really are and not trying/try to be like people you see on TV.
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