First of all we
have to say that (...) most people who choose this method are responsible. We don’t
have to forget that our house is being used by other people. This is one of
the reasons for which/ why I/ I would agree to swap my house, I’m also/ I would also be in a house that is not
mine and I will/ would try to keep it very
well.
On the other
hand, and with the situation that lot of people are living now, swapping houses
is an opportunity to know the world and live a new experience with a few/ little money. You
only have to found/ to find a person who wants to swap his house, a cheap ticket and a supermarket
where you can buy basic products.
As I see it,
this way of travelling is a cheap opportunity to see the world.
Sergi Olvera 2A
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ReplyDeleteI agree with you. I think house swapping is an original way of visiting new places, meeting new people, improving our English and so on. Maybe you focused too much on the economic advantages. As I see it, you could have talked a bit more about other points. However, I think your text is quite correct.
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ReplyDeleteI like your view, house swapping is new way to know the world and know anothers countries and anothers cultures, but personally I would'nt swap my house.
ReplyDeleteI agree with you, because it is a new way to be able to travel and of cheap form. Also since you've said your "most people who choose this method are responsible. We don’t have to forget that our house is being used by other people" it is a great advantage because we have fairly high percentage to fully trust these who will live in our house.
ReplyDeleteI also agree with you. House swaping is a very good way to make travelling cheaper. The only thing you should be worried about is who is going to stay at your house and to make sure that they are reliable people.
ReplyDeleteI'm agree with you because it's a new form if travel and make new friends. That would be a good form if people are responsable with his acts.
ReplyDeleteI agree that it is a cheaper way of seeing the world, but, in my opinion, I would not be calm knowing that someone else is living in my house. The people may seem responsible and not be. Would you be comfortable knowing that other people are living in your house? I not. But I think that is a good way to travel for people who are more entrusted.
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ReplyDeleteI agree, house swapping is a good tool against the crisis. I supose that it helps a lot of people nowadays.
ReplyDeleteI agree with you in the part of economizing, but I think (it's only my opinion) that I wouldn't be comfortable in the house of another person. What would happen if I break something important or valuable?
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