The number of people who go to the gym increased during the 90s, but nowadays the tendency is to give it up replacing it by doing no sport.
First of all I think we should know what a gym is. A gym is an urban indoor place where you can do some sport exercises. But why did people start to fill gyms in the 90s? That's because these people wanted to get thinner in order to be more attractive in current society. But we should realise that a healthy body is not given by a gym, but by health... and in part we can get healthy practising sport, but not only with sport, we should carry out a balanced diet, sleep well and not getting stressed by work or everyday's lifestyle. Moreover, I think sports that make you feel closer to nature are more healthy to our mind... I mean sports like running, cycling, swimming, hiking, sailing... Furthermore, these sports are highly recommended by cardiologists, nutritionists...
In conclusion, I think that the thing what we really should take into account is our health, because without it, we can't do anything. And this is what we should say to somebody who leaves a gym saying "because I haven't improved my figure": avoiding sport and, consequently, a healthy lifestyle, the thing you're not improving is your life quality.
As you can see most of the mistakes you've made are WW, that means you are translating from Spanish.
ReplyDeleteIn the first sentence I would say something like: el número de gente.... and then be careful, because if you are talking about the 90's you need the past simple...
Correct the mistakes and keep the corrections underlined or change their colour so that I don't have to read everything again.
There were still some mistakes ( words in red). The final correction is in blue. Once you've read it, erase the words in red and change the colour of my corrections.
ReplyDeleteI have erased the mistakes and I think it's okay now. Thanks for your corrections.
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