Nowadays when we watch TV, we realise that many of the advertisments are about products that make you lose weight, make up, fashion and many other things like that. We can find publicity that shows us how to wear something and it shows you the perfect model. So many people change their opinion and they think they have to be as the models they see on TV.
Currently physical appearance has become very important in many people's lives and many of them change their body because they want the same body as many famouse/ famous people. For example many teenagers believe that their physical appearance is more important than studying and when it becomes an obsesion they've got a serious problem.
It's important because you have to look as a professional if you want have a job. But many people think they have to have the same lips as Angelina Jolie or the same body as Jennyfer Lopez and they become copies and many times there are people addicted to products that can change their appearance for example botox.
Thanks for your post!
ReplyDeleteBe careful because the structure is not right. Remember it's an opinion essay and there should be 3 paragraphs, not 4. Apart from correcting the mistakes - keeping the changes underlined - I'd like you to use connectors. Revise the photocopy I gave you.
Good correction. There's one more mistake (spelling mistake). Erase the word in red.
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